Does this sound good to you?

I think it's a very powerful thesis statement overall, but I think that words like engulfing and doomed are a bit strong. It's not awkward, and were I grading it I would definitely give it a very high score. Perhaps you could say 'the great deal of damage that has been brought down upon...' or 'ravished upon' instead of doomed upon. Or something like that. It IS very good, though.